cdjensen94
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Color Alignment: Blue, Black, Green
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Post by cdjensen94 on Mar 10, 2021 23:17:41 GMT
Did I post something decent for once? Or are you just really busy.
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cdjensen94
2/2 Zombie

I love Gaming, Magic, Writing, and Art
Posts: 100
Favorite Card: Vorinclex, Voice of Hunger
Favorite Set: New Phyrexia, Ixalan
Color Alignment: Blue, Black, Green
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Post by cdjensen94 on Mar 24, 2021 22:41:19 GMT
Wow it's really quiet here lately, I can share more cards just feel kinda stupid with no one saying hi and I'm just not that good at it. Probably annoying critiquing me, I do appreciate it though.
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Post by dangerousdice on Mar 24, 2021 22:57:23 GMT
no, it's okay!
if you want to be more involved in the community, maybe try to do one of the contests?
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cdjensen94
2/2 Zombie

I love Gaming, Magic, Writing, and Art
Posts: 100
Favorite Card: Vorinclex, Voice of Hunger
Favorite Set: New Phyrexia, Ixalan
Color Alignment: Blue, Black, Green
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Post by cdjensen94 on Mar 24, 2021 23:02:48 GMT
Okay, sounds like it could be fun.
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galva94
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Posts: 121
Favorite Card: Cryptic Command
Favorite Set: Kamigawa
Color Alignment: Blue, Green
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Post by galva94 on Apr 6, 2021 8:10:07 GMT
I give you some random thoughts on your cards: - Vorek: The power level here is that of a common, not of a bicolor legendary uncommon. I would buff P/T or give more relevant ability than haste - Master of death: vigilance and first strike are color-pie breaks on a G/B cards. Haste is unusual but can stay In general I would use existing magic creature type for your card: for example, Im not sure wha a Vamperein exactly is, but maybe Vampire could be fine? - Maerik: the untap ability doesnt really feel BG to me, the -3 either. - Yoren: the second ability is kinda cool, altough you don't need to involve Y and Z. X and Y are fine, since the first ability doesn't conflicts. Now that I think about it, the first ability is useless when you have the second one: much more efficient. - Tested patience: put a temporary effect on an aura is very weird. If you need to do it for flavor reason, you can use some kind of "two counters" text, where the aura is automatically sacrificed after. Anyway the cost is too high: maybe U or 1U would be fine. - Library cycle: These I like! (typo in the green one) In general almost all of your cards seems unprofessional because 1. you are not using the official mana symbols 2. the art are not really what one expects (but the choice here is yours) 3. The wording is messy. I suggest you to google existing cards as reference to get the correct wording. After a while you should get used to it and get the wording right at the first time. I found this "tutorials" on youtube that can be really usefull: very short explanations, but really well done www.youtube.com/watch?v=b3WaieT-nhQ&ab_channel=StrataGames You should check them out
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cdjensen94
2/2 Zombie

I love Gaming, Magic, Writing, and Art
Posts: 100
Favorite Card: Vorinclex, Voice of Hunger
Favorite Set: New Phyrexia, Ixalan
Color Alignment: Blue, Black, Green
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Post by cdjensen94 on Apr 8, 2021 17:59:05 GMT
I did switch back to the original mana symbol, just haven't felt like any of my stuff is worth posting. The wording is a mess I know It's where I struggle. I just don't know what to write and what to search. I have thousands of cards. just don 't know which one's to look at. I guess I could try searching for similar effects, because its probably already been done. The art is of my own creation so that's why I use it. Most of the art is place holder however. I will be adding in some backgrounds, other than the gray ones. In addition I can run filters to make it more paint like if you think that's what it needs. As far as the unprofessional goes its a hobby, you want to see professional check out my deviantart minus the cards I shared there. For a long time I used templates that I custom made so the mana symbols were used to go with the custom ultra-hd templates I made. Thanks for the advice.
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galva94
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Posts: 121
Favorite Card: Cryptic Command
Favorite Set: Kamigawa
Color Alignment: Blue, Green
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Post by galva94 on Apr 8, 2021 18:20:57 GMT
I you have a lot of cards, I suggest posting the ones that feels more "unique" to you, doesn't really matter if they are commons or mythics. Show cards which includes new mechanics, or new design, and that is more interesting that lot of cards that are similar to other existing card in the game. Maybe it would be interesting to see the factions of your world, and to characterize them with a unique playstyle or mechanic.
For the wording aspect, it's not really that hard. Just google for cards with similar effects and you get the idea of how to proceed. Suddenly your cards will feel a lot more readable and easy to grasp.
Try to post some other stuff if you wish, I'll keep an eye on this post!
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cdjensen94
2/2 Zombie

I love Gaming, Magic, Writing, and Art
Posts: 100
Favorite Card: Vorinclex, Voice of Hunger
Favorite Set: New Phyrexia, Ixalan
Color Alignment: Blue, Black, Green
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Post by cdjensen94 on Apr 8, 2021 18:28:43 GMT
I meant thousands of official cards. I have only hundred of custom ones. I posted the legendary cards that had named characters because their integral to my story, but I guess as far a cards go they are average. Vamperein aren't vampires they were cursed with vampirism, but they were originally vampires in an old draft, I just kept the name.
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galva94
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Posts: 121
Favorite Card: Cryptic Command
Favorite Set: Kamigawa
Color Alignment: Blue, Green
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Post by galva94 on Apr 8, 2021 18:39:02 GMT
You don't need to have a card, to look for wording  Just search online, it's faster and you have all the reference you want. By the way, I just want to clarify: I like your digital art (how are you doing it, btw?) but just feels a little bit odd on mtg cards. Even if your card creation skills aren't perfect, you can learn a lot so don't give up!
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cdjensen94
2/2 Zombie

I love Gaming, Magic, Writing, and Art
Posts: 100
Favorite Card: Vorinclex, Voice of Hunger
Favorite Set: New Phyrexia, Ixalan
Color Alignment: Blue, Black, Green
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Post by cdjensen94 on Apr 8, 2021 18:42:44 GMT
Search with like Scryfall or WotC's Gatherer. And Thanks. I'm on here because I'm trying to learn. I'm slowly making improvements, just slowly. I use blender and Daz3D Studio for my 3d artwork.
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cdjensen94
2/2 Zombie

I love Gaming, Magic, Writing, and Art
Posts: 100
Favorite Card: Vorinclex, Voice of Hunger
Favorite Set: New Phyrexia, Ixalan
Color Alignment: Blue, Black, Green
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Post by cdjensen94 on Apr 8, 2021 19:14:10 GMT
 his one is kind of unique but its a mess.
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Post by dangerousdice on Apr 8, 2021 21:52:23 GMT
it might be better at  , but i'm not sure, as this is a effect that I don't think they've done before.
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thaneofglamis
8/8 Octopus
 
Thane's activated abilities can't be activated
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Favorite Card: Slimefoot, the Stowaway; Phyrexian Rager; Swarm Shambler
Favorite Set: Midnight Hunt
Color Alignment: Green
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Post by thaneofglamis on Apr 8, 2021 22:02:14 GMT
It's effectively a universal Chromatic Lantern with a body. I'd say it's costed appropriately, as the Lantern is very strong, but the downside of perfectly fixing your opponents' mana as well is significant.
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galva94
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Favorite Card: Cryptic Command
Favorite Set: Kamigawa
Color Alignment: Blue, Green
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Post by galva94 on Apr 9, 2021 7:00:04 GMT
If you want to be absolutely accurate with the wording, try to emulate the text of cards like Prismatic Omen
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cdjensen94
2/2 Zombie

I love Gaming, Magic, Writing, and Art
Posts: 100
Favorite Card: Vorinclex, Voice of Hunger
Favorite Set: New Phyrexia, Ixalan
Color Alignment: Blue, Black, Green
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Post by cdjensen94 on Apr 9, 2021 15:42:48 GMT
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cdjensen94
2/2 Zombie

I love Gaming, Magic, Writing, and Art
Posts: 100
Favorite Card: Vorinclex, Voice of Hunger
Favorite Set: New Phyrexia, Ixalan
Color Alignment: Blue, Black, Green
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Post by cdjensen94 on Jan 2, 2022 18:00:46 GMT
Well I have some questions about my set I'm working on. I have a race known as Vamperein, no not vampires. The name was originally for a vampire race, then they became cursed with vampirism. That's beside the point, I want to have them as elves because they are elf like, but I want tribal spells that effect just them. So I have them as a Wild Elf. Should I right wild elf or elf wild in the type. Secondly I've really improved my card making skills, lurking and learning, plus taking all the wonderful advice to heart, should I even bother posting cards. I mean for tweaking I love the feedback, but I feel like I'm a nuisance, am I or do people like helping people on this forum. I have a few more issues I'd like help with just afraid to ask.
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cdjensen94
2/2 Zombie

I love Gaming, Magic, Writing, and Art
Posts: 100
Favorite Card: Vorinclex, Voice of Hunger
Favorite Set: New Phyrexia, Ixalan
Color Alignment: Blue, Black, Green
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Post by cdjensen94 on Jan 3, 2022 2:11:43 GMT
Nevermind on the first question, my mom convinced me to keep the special type. Please answer the second question.
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galva94
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Favorite Set: Kamigawa
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Post by galva94 on Jan 11, 2022 9:52:26 GMT
Posting cards is welcome, maybe you can write a word or two about what kind of help you need with the card. Posting a lot of them without any background or any question for the community is not really appealing for obtaining potential help. For example, you can try posting few finished cards with some description/flavour to contextualize a bit more. O,r you can share unfinished ideas with the questions/issues you need to solve. Now that you said you improved your design skill, I'm actually curious to see some results!
Regarding the first question, I kinda like the idea of using an additional creature type "Wild elf". It means that a lord can say for example "All other wild creatures you control gets +1/+1". It is a bitt odd nevertheless, because I think the only other examples of this use of the sub-types as adjectives is "Elder" and "Urza's", both fairly uncommon to see. So, unless you really need to have lord referring to all elves and lord referring to a subset of them, I would prefer create a new creature type or just use elf (I assume they are the only kind of elves in your world)
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cdjensen94
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I love Gaming, Magic, Writing, and Art
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Favorite Card: Vorinclex, Voice of Hunger
Favorite Set: New Phyrexia, Ixalan
Color Alignment: Blue, Black, Green
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Post by cdjensen94 on Jan 13, 2022 0:06:31 GMT
Thank you so much. Your post is in the top ten most helpful post I've received on here. I will definetly share what I need help with.
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cdjensen94
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I love Gaming, Magic, Writing, and Art
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Favorite Card: Vorinclex, Voice of Hunger
Favorite Set: New Phyrexia, Ixalan
Color Alignment: Blue, Black, Green
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Post by cdjensen94 on Jan 13, 2022 0:07:16 GMT
Also the second half was amazingly insightful.
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cdjensen94
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I love Gaming, Magic, Writing, and Art
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Favorite Card: Vorinclex, Voice of Hunger
Favorite Set: New Phyrexia, Ixalan
Color Alignment: Blue, Black, Green
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Post by cdjensen94 on Jan 15, 2022 1:53:22 GMT
 I need help with the second lore thingy and to know a good cost for this card.
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Post by pacifistwestwoman on Jan 15, 2022 5:08:53 GMT
How I would word these: 1. "Search your library for a legendary land card, put it on the battlefield, then shuffle." 2. "Put a stasis counter on target planeswalker. Your opponents cannot activate abilities of planeswalkers with stasis counters on them." 3. "Your opponents can't cast creature spells." Notes: Given that it costs 6 mana in red/white, it's probably close to fine. 1. Land tutor is out of color for RW, but it being legendary probably makes it fine. I might make it "put it on the battlefield tapped" 2. This is probably fine. 3. Regardless of what else you do with it, I would make it so there's some way to play around it other than enchantment removal. Like "creature spells your opponents cast cost (2 or 3) more) Also, because it's a Saga, and gets sacrificed after III, you would want to do one of the following: a. "Until your next turn, your opponents can't cast creature spells." b. "Create a colorless [insert name] artifact token with 'Your opponents can't cast creature spells.'" c. Make it a Discovery instead of a Saga, since you don't sac discoveries. (Discoveries aren't in canon magic. As far as I know, they were first used in the custom set Scriptures of Urshad)
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cdjensen94
2/2 Zombie

I love Gaming, Magic, Writing, and Art
Posts: 100
Favorite Card: Vorinclex, Voice of Hunger
Favorite Set: New Phyrexia, Ixalan
Color Alignment: Blue, Black, Green
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Post by cdjensen94 on Jan 15, 2022 20:37:01 GMT
What color should a land tutor be?
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cdjensen94
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I love Gaming, Magic, Writing, and Art
Posts: 100
Favorite Card: Vorinclex, Voice of Hunger
Favorite Set: New Phyrexia, Ixalan
Color Alignment: Blue, Black, Green
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Post by cdjensen94 on Jan 15, 2022 20:38:21 GMT
Is green more appropriate?
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Post by pacifistwestwoman on Jan 16, 2022 4:11:07 GMT
Is green more appropriate? Generally, if any color is going to get a land tutor, it would be green, but there are reasons for other colors to get land tutors/ramp I think it would make sense for RW to search for specifically a legendary land, since that color pair, at least in my head, is associated with artifacts and auras, and historic stuff (from Dominaria), so it wouldn't be too out of place.
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cdjensen94
2/2 Zombie

I love Gaming, Magic, Writing, and Art
Posts: 100
Favorite Card: Vorinclex, Voice of Hunger
Favorite Set: New Phyrexia, Ixalan
Color Alignment: Blue, Black, Green
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Post by cdjensen94 on Jan 17, 2022 3:50:18 GMT
I can honestly make it green, if you think I should, I just chose the colors that were pertinent to planeswalker in question, actually I think I will change it.
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cdjensen94
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I love Gaming, Magic, Writing, and Art
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Favorite Card: Vorinclex, Voice of Hunger
Favorite Set: New Phyrexia, Ixalan
Color Alignment: Blue, Black, Green
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Post by cdjensen94 on Feb 12, 2023 22:16:59 GMT
Here's a redo of an older card I did with my custom template. Attachments:
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