crouton
0/0 Germ
Posts: 6
Favorite Card: Ad Nauseam
Favorite Set: Journey Into Nyx
Color Alignment: Black, Colorless
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Post by crouton on Jan 31, 2020 5:43:50 GMT
 I was messing around a while ago and made a few things here and there: I've been looking to make something for play in a friend group, but sadly there isn't any one play style I like all too much, so deciding was tough. Weird, I know, but I like flavor and art over most other parts of the game, since I have fun no matter what I'm playing usually. So, I made one with an aesthetic I liked, and Luna was born. I haven't played a group hug deck before really, but I know a big part of it is that the commander gives the benefit, so people aren't encouraged to target it. But, I did a value idea based off other group hug cards in the 99 instead, so she might have more of a target on her back. Any questions or suggestions would be great! I'm really pleased with how the concept came out, but whether or not the card works is yet to be seen, since I'm no designer. |
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Post by arthurxiv on Jan 31, 2020 9:25:57 GMT
Which token are you talking about ? Try: "The first time a source you control would cause an opponent to gain life each turn, choose one — • Draw a card. • Create a xx token. • Gain control of target permanent you own. • Pay  : The next spell you cast this turn has cascade." |
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Post by fluffydeathbringer on Jan 31, 2020 10:47:33 GMT
so I dig the general theme you've got going on, but - most of the time on any given turn you're gonna be spending mana on the thing that triggers the ability on top of the , so it's not gonna give you a lot of mana to cast that cascade spell with - in a group-hug deck, I don't think cascading is what you're gonna want to do. people'll be removing your group hug generators pretty rarely so you're not gonna need a lot of them to stack
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Post by Lady Mapi on Jan 31, 2020 13:46:29 GMT
Which token are you talking about ? Try: "The first time a source you control would cause an opponent to gain life each turn, choose one — • Draw a card. • Create a xx token. • Gain control of target permanent you own. • Pay : The next spell you cast this turn has cascade." You're misreading it - the first time you make an opponent... • Gain life. • Draw cards. • Make tokens. • Take control of your stuff. each turn, you can pay to give your next spell cascade. --- crouton, I feel like the trigger might be too broad? Also, giving your opponents your stuff (as opposed to trading things between the two of you) has become more of a Red thing, so I'd drop that. I also agree with fluffydeathbringer's comment that you don't really want Cascade in a group hug deck. Bant isn't my color combo, so I can't think of a distinctive benefit you could use instead (the White messes me up, mostly.) |
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crouton
0/0 Germ
Posts: 6
Favorite Card: Ad Nauseam
Favorite Set: Journey Into Nyx
Color Alignment: Black, Colorless
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Post by crouton on Jan 31, 2020 15:20:52 GMT
 Ok, here's version 2.0 with everyones feedback! Misreading the card as a list of options gave me a different spin on the value idea, and I quite like this concept, especially since the cascade idea wasn't very bant-y. Speaking of colors, I almost felt obligated to make one option be a gain life choice, but 99% of the time I imagine that's going to be the worse option by far, and I wouldn't want there to be a fallback "worst pick" option for my opponent. So, I added another effect to it that I think fits well. Saddest thing is, if this does work, the program doesn't fit the flavor text comfortably. I thought it was the perfect flavor touch, but it's a sacrifice I'm willing to make. And thanks for the help, fluffydeathbringer and Lady Mapi! You can tell I'm newer at this. |
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Post by arthurxiv on Feb 3, 2020 9:29:57 GMT
Sorry for my mistake.
Yes now it seems to be a nice card.
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Post by Jéské Couriano on Feb 3, 2020 19:53:40 GMT
Saddest thing is, if this does work, the program doesn't fit the flavor text comfortably. I thought it was the perfect flavor touch, but it's a sacrifice I'm willing to make. And thanks for the help, fluffydeathbringer and Lady Mapi ! You can tell I'm newer at this.
You can use Shift+Return to force a linebreak as opposed to going on a new line. (The difference being going on a new line includes about half-a-line's worth of spacing.)
There is also a template that allows you to adjust the card's whitespace on top and bottom so that flavour text won't bleed into the rarity stamp or P/T box, but I'm not sure if it has been updated with the Dominaria legendary frames.
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