suitjackal
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Favorite Card: Hinata, Dawn-Crowned
Favorite Set: D&D - Adventures in the Forgotten Realms
Color Alignment: Blue, Red, Green
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Post by suitjackal on Apr 12, 2022 22:19:47 GMT
Making a thread in the card clinic for cards I'm making for my Vestiges set over at this thread. Whereas that one's more about the worldbuilding, I'm looking for specific advice on cards here, like cost, p/t, ability wording, etc. I'll post cards I think are very important to the set or that I'm unsure about, and use the lessons I learn to tweak the majority. I really appreciate any feedback, cuz I really like doing this and would love this set to be realistic and well-balanced. Note: I'm building mostly for commander, but it would be nice if these cards also didn't immediately break other formats. Thank you in advance! |
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suitjackal
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Posts: 17
Favorite Card: Hinata, Dawn-Crowned
Favorite Set: D&D - Adventures in the Forgotten Realms
Color Alignment: Blue, Red, Green
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Post by suitjackal on Apr 12, 2022 22:27:51 GMT
I want to perfect the commanders for each vestige. The color identities are absolute, as are the "minor" (hybrid) pips and "major" (nonhybrid) color pips, but the total cost is not. P/T is also not absolute, though I'd like all the commanders to have the same total power+toughness and total mana value if possible. First, Legendary Creature - Human Shaman 
Lifelink
Other permanents you control have lifelink and “Whenever this permanent becomes the target of a spell, it deals two damage to target player.”
1/5
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suitjackal
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Favorite Card: Hinata, Dawn-Crowned
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Post by suitjackal on Apr 12, 2022 22:32:53 GMT
Second,
Legendary Creature - Human Wizard Menace
  : Target artifact or enchantment spell with mana value X you control enters the battlefield as an X/X Thrull creature in addition to its other types.
4/2
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suitjackal
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Favorite Card: Hinata, Dawn-Crowned
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Post by suitjackal on Apr 12, 2022 22:36:26 GMT
Third,
Legendary Creature - Human Berserker Trample
Aggressive (There is an additional combat phase after the first one on your turn. Aggressive creatures untap at the beginning of this phase, and only they can attack and have abilities trigger due to combat during it.)
Whenever Lyev, Fervent Fighter attacks, you may have him deal one damage to each creature and planeswalker defending player controls. 5/1
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suitjackal
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Posts: 17
Favorite Card: Hinata, Dawn-Crowned
Favorite Set: D&D - Adventures in the Forgotten Realms
Color Alignment: Blue, Red, Green
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Post by suitjackal on Apr 12, 2022 22:39:12 GMT
Fourth,
Legendary Creature - Human Cleric
Wither
When Mwasaa, Sickening Seer enters the battlefield, and at the beginning of your upkeep, you get a poison counter.
Once on each of your turns, you may pay 0 rather than pay the mana cost for a spell you cast with mana value X or less, where X is the number of poison counters on you.
3/3
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suitjackal
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Posts: 17
Favorite Card: Hinata, Dawn-Crowned
Favorite Set: D&D - Adventures in the Forgotten Realms
Color Alignment: Blue, Red, Green
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Post by suitjackal on Apr 12, 2022 22:44:04 GMT
Fifth,
Legendary Creature - Human Ranger First strike  ,  : Draw a card, then you may put a land card from your hand onto the battlefield. If you don’t, discard a card. Whenever a permanent with a mana ability enters the battlefield under your control, creatures you control get +1/+1 until your next turn.
2/4
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suitjackal
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Posts: 17
Favorite Card: Hinata, Dawn-Crowned
Favorite Set: D&D - Adventures in the Forgotten Realms
Color Alignment: Blue, Red, Green
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Post by suitjackal on Apr 12, 2022 22:49:40 GMT
And finally,
(Liyev after Eldrazi transformation) Legendary Creature - Eldrazi Berserker
Devoid (This card has no color.)
Trample, annihilator 1
Aggressive (There is an additional combat phase after the first one on your turn. Aggressive creatures untap at the beginning of this phase, and only they can attack and have abilities trigger due to combat during it.)
5/5 (unequal mana value and total p/t to others due to power gained and control lost via Eldrazi conscription)
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