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Post by gluestick248 on May 4, 2019 22:19:54 GMT
Up: That’s a mighty large robot you got there. Sadly, your “assembly” mechanic needs retooling. As is, skipping your untap step isn’t great, but that ability only costs 3 mana, and you’re probably using it on turn 7. Combine that with all the new proliferating from War of the Spark (and the originals from Scars of Mirrodin) and you have a hexproof Blightsteel Colossus that gains you 24 life on turn 7. I like the idea, but this execution is too powerful. Unholy Collusion   Sorcery Exile all creatures. If you control a Bolas Planeswalker, an Eldrazi creature, and a colored artifact as you cast ~, you win the game instead. There they stood, Bolas, Eldrazi, Phyrexians...never before had the multiverse seen such a terrifying alliance.Next: ”Turn around” |
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MaiApologies (She/Her)
1/1 Squirrel
Posts: 61
Favorite Card: Ambiguity
Favorite Set: Ikoria: Lair of Behemoths
Color Alignment: Blue, Red
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Post by MaiApologies (She/Her) on Nov 21, 2019 6:26:21 GMT
Up: I'm no expert on Magic yet, so don't quote me on this, but it looks to be about on par with other alternate win cards. It seems to make thematic sense too, from what I understand about Bolas. (I'm not going to give it a score, because again, no expert on Magic so I don't know if this card is actually good or not.)  Next: " Well, I'm not complaining."
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Post by Flo00 on Sept 17, 2020 1:03:53 GMT
Up: That looks very powerful. I guess you could play this in a deck that has only expensive creatures and just pay two mana to get something big. It's balanced out pretty nicely by letting it fight something of an opponent's choice. I guess it was intentional that this can lead to fight between your your own creatures? It should say "fights another creature of an opponent's choice", else it might fight itself, which is not a good idea. (It would deal damage to itself equal to its power twice.) I also think you should just put the creature on the battlefield instead of casting it for free. If you let it be cast, then it gets on the stack and people can respond to it and stuff. And the rest of the card would be a delayed trigger or something weird. Kaalia’s Gift    Enchantment - Aura  Enchant creature Enchanted creature gets +3/+3, gains flying, trample and “At the beginning of your upkeep, sacriifce another creature and put a +1/+1 counter on this creature.” and is an Angel, Demon, Dragon in addition to its other types. “Well, I’m not complaining.”Next: And just when Bruse thought his day couldn't get any worse. |
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Post by hydraheadhunter on Jan 29, 2021 15:06:59 GMT
Iol Lark, Prestigious Turncoat
A generic, a Black, and a blUe
Legendary Creature - Human Enemy
Sacrifice another commander: Iol gets +1/+1 for each time you've cast another commander from the command zone this game.
Accomplice (This may be your third commander if the other two have partner. You may only have two commanders in your command zone at the same time. At the beginning of the game, shuffle one of your commanders into your library).
And just when Bruse thought his day couldn't get any worse.
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Next: Arson is so much easier than shoveling snow.
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Post by Flo00 on May 24, 2021 12:25:03 GMT
I know it's not customary to post in fast games when my post is the next to last, yet this flavor was so easy yet no one took it for four month. Up: Acomplice is a strange mechanic that pushes commander even more towards multicolor (at least the way you present it), which I'm not really in favour. There is already enough stuff that lets you easily go four or five color, which in my opinion dampens the spirit of the format a bit. Other than that, Iol seems pretty weak. Which I guess makes up for the fact that he is an acomplice. I like how you play around with the partner mechnic and having multiple commanders. I think it would have been better without acomplice (maybe partner; or just as single commander or part of the 99) and just letting you sacrifice any creature (maybe plus a mana cost). Then Iol could just count all commander casts, including their own. Flame Plow instant  Flame Plow deals 3 damage to target creature or planeswalker. If that permanent dies this turn, its controller sacrifices a snow land. Arson is so much easier than shoveling snow.Next: “zqjx. You’re welcome.”
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Post by hydraheadhunter on Sept 20, 2021 13:01:39 GMT
I know it's not customary to post in fast games when my post is the next to last, yet this flavor was so easy yet no one took it for four month. I'm not gonna call your flavor text easy, but otherwise same. It should be obvious, this is a silver border card.
Up: Lightning Strike with an upside. It wouldn't be flashy enough to make it into my commander deck unless I knew I'd be playing against that guy who plays snow lands for the aesthetic; but I'm sure it'd have it's place in a set on a wintery plane because snow hate is a thing this game needs more of.
Zqjx, Pangram Enthusiast Three generic, a red, A blue, A white Legendary Creature - Homunculus Author Permanents you control which contain all 26 letters in the english alphabet in their text box have deathtouch, flying, hexproof, indestructible, menace, reach, trample, vigilance, and protection from the letter K. FT: “zqj. You’re welcome.” —Bucky, flavor text writer3/3 (I made one minor edit (I removed the X because it's in "Text" already, and also in the rules text), to make the joke punch more accurately, but I pay ammouge to that X in Zqjx's name).
Next: attribute this to whoever you'd like: "I'm going to void your warranty"
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Post by gluestick248 on Sept 20, 2021 14:30:15 GMT
Up: The only English card I could find that fits is (unsurprisingly) Now I Know My ABC’s, and a strategic Phoebe could get there too. There might be other options in other languages though. As for the pangram theme, I’m totally on board. I’ve even designed a pangram commander myself, though it’s a bit more sneaky. {Here’s Pangros}  Now for my submission: Azorius Appraiser Creature — Human Advisor Artifacts leaving the battlefield don't cause abilities to trigger. “I’m going to void your warranty.”2/2 Next flavor text: “Don’t make any sudden movements.” |
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Post by Flo00 on Feb 4, 2022 9:53:57 GMT
Up: A bit narrow, but a nice hate bear for sideboards. Irritated Slashbug  Creature - Insect  Whenever a creature with haste or first strike attacks, put a +1/+1 counter on Irritated Slashbug and Irritated Slashbug deals 2 damage to that creature. Don’t make any sudden movements.Next: In the wake of the battle not everyone was mourning - some were feeding. |
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pernicious
8/8 Octopus
Posts: 440
Favorite Card: Mistmeadow Skulk
Favorite Set: Shadowmoor block
Color Alignment: Red
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Post by pernicious on Apr 1, 2022 8:49:24 GMT
Up: Balanced cost and rarity; flavorful and powerful effect. Makes for a good sideboard defense card for decks that don't use first strike or haste, or it could exploit haste/first strike bestowing red effects to freely slash at the enemy's creatures. You forgot P/T; for that cost, it could have been 2/2.
Creature - Zombie  , Exile target creature card from a graveyard: Put a +1/+1 counter on Feaster of the Fallen. Activate only during postcombat main phase. In the wake of the battle not everyone was mourning - some were feeding. 2/2
Next: "The scarecrow took them all. Nobody left. But me."
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Post by hydraheadhunter on May 1, 2022 18:56:08 GMT
Up: The card has great ludonarrative resonance, but it's a bit awkward ludotically; since you have to tap it to particapate in combat and tap it to 'feast' after combat, it can't do both in one turn. Farrow Harvest
X generic, A green, and a black
Sorcery
Each land you control doesn't untap during your next untap step unless you pay 2 life.
Fetch X basic lands to the battlefield tapped.
FT: "The scarecrow took them all. Nobody left. But me."
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pernicious
8/8 Octopus
Posts: 440
Favorite Card: Mistmeadow Skulk
Favorite Set: Shadowmoor block
Color Alignment: Red
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Post by pernicious on May 3, 2022 9:16:13 GMT
Up: That's a really powerful card. The "pay 2 life" effect is well placed, it avoids making the card too OP. You forgot rarity; for that power level, it could be mythic rare. The flavor is good, it gives me the image of a haunted scarecrow taking away the land from many unlucky farmers. The title doesn't convince me, did you mean Harrow instead of Farrow?
Enchantment - Whenever a creature token would enter the battlefield under your control, Homing Armaments deals damage equal to that creature's strength to any target instead.
"Who needs men when you have knives?" - Aurla the Sharp
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Post by hydraheadhunter on May 3, 2022 10:18:07 GMT
You forgot rarity; for that power level, it could be mythic rare.
I didn't forget rarity, I choose to not include for single cards if it's not relevant to the challenge, because rarity's a bit of a scam and a half to sell packs and I'm not selling packs. |
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Post by Idea on May 4, 2022 16:39:45 GMT
Up: That's a really powerful card. The "pay 2 life" effect is well placed, it avoids making the card too OP. You forgot rarity; for that power level, it could be mythic rare. The flavor is good, it gives me the image of a haunted scarecrow taking away the land from many unlucky farmers. The title doesn't convince me, did you mean Harrow instead of Farrow?
Homing Armaments " style="max-width:100%;"] Enchantment - " style="max-width:100%;"] Whenever a creature token would enter the battlefield under your control, Homing Armaments deals damage equal to that creature's strength to any target instead.
"Who needs men when you have knives?" - Aurla the Sharp
Next: "Hello, Potion Seller, I am going into battle and I want your strongest potions." So this instantly kills tokens in return for damage dealing to any target. On its own I think this is an interesting trade, sacrificing potential long-term impact for a more immediate one. That being said this can really produce a lot of burn very easily, and it's a card that is begging to be combo-ed with something to create a one-turn-kill. While the idea is interesting mechanically, it doesn't sound fun to be on the receiving end and in my opinion it costs too little for an effect that looks so easy to abuse. As for the flavor it's a clever fit but I don't see where the "you don't get creatures" part comes in in a more overall idea of "you have these magic armaments, why does this mean you don't get the people you normally would". Still, fits with the original flavor you were given. I'd say 7/10. Now for my entry:  Edit: Noticed that "and" in there. At this point I don't have a ton of time to edit the card itself, so I'll just leave this note here requesting that to be ignored. If there's no reply when I get back I might go and fix it though. And the flavor for next poster: "A problem is only a problem if someone thinks of it as a problem." |
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Post by hydraheadhunter on May 4, 2022 17:46:51 GMT
Panic Haggling
Two generic Xs and a red
Instant
Exile the top X plus 2 cards of your library. You may cast one of those cards until end of turn as though it had flash.
FT: "Hello, Potion Seller, I am going into battle and I want your strongest potions."
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Up: it's got some quirky language I as a pedant instinctively want to streamline, "You may cast one of those cards as though it had flash [this turn]." I'd also think if you're putting a good amount of mana into this you should get a reduction on the cost of the card you cast, like if you put in a good amount of mana to get a decent X value, you should be able to play the seven mana bomb you payed twice X to impluse into. (also go ahead and change the render if you want. No one'll be mad.)
Maestros Public Relations
A generic, a black, a blue, and a red
Enchantment
Whenever a nontoken creature you don't control dies, its controller may
pay its mana cost to return it to the battlefield under their control except it gains
"If this would leave the battlefield, exile it instead." When they do, you may return
a creature card from a graveyard to the battlefield under your control.
FT: A problem is only a problem if someone thinks of it as a problem.
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Next, a two part adlib: "I came here to [verb A] [noun A] and [verb B] [noun B]..." and "...and I'm all outta [noun B]."
This comes from the quote "kick ass and chew bubblegum, and I'm all outta bubblegum," but I don't want to commit you to a universe where bubblegum exists, you've got a lot of freedom here, but you will need to either design two cards or a double-faced card, one card face for each part.
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Post by Idea on May 5, 2022 13:52:16 GMT
Panic Haggling
Two generic Xs and a red
Instant
Exile the top X plus 2 cards of your library. You may cast one of those cards until end of turn as though it had flash.
FT: "Hello, Potion Seller, I am going into battle and I want your strongest potions."
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Up: it's got some quirky language I as a pedant instinctively want to streamline, "You may cast one of those cards as though it had flash [this turn]." I'd also think if you're putting a good amount of mana into this you should get a reduction on the cost of the card you cast, like if you put in a good amount of mana to get a decent X value, you should be able to play the seven mana bomb you payed twice X to impluse into. (also go ahead and change the render if you want. No one'll be mad.)
Upon further thought I think it probably would have been more sensible to put just put X + a fixed colorless (maybe 2 colorless?) + 1 red, as opposed to two Xs and 1 red. I don't think a discount goes well with the flavor of this card (as the idea is you're overpaying because you're getting something at the last minute as opposed to a careful purchase) but two Xs may be pushing it. |
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Post by hydraheadhunter on May 5, 2022 14:01:47 GMT
Upon further thought I think it probably would have been more sensible to put just put X + a fixed colorless (maybe 2 colorless?) + 1 red, as opposed to two Xs and 1 red. I don't think a discount goes well with the flavor of this card (as the idea is you're overpaying because you're getting something at the last minute as opposed to a careful purchase) but two Xs may be pushing it. I'm a sucker for XX spells, so it'd be a shame in my eyes to see that go, and I personally would see it as a win flavor-wise, the mana I spend on the spell represents the amount of effort I put into haggling for a better price, so I'd get a small discount for my efforts. I'm actually gonna grab this card idea for a deck if you don't mind too terribly. |
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Post by Idea on May 5, 2022 15:13:07 GMT
Upon further thought I think it probably would have been more sensible to put just put X + a fixed colorless (maybe 2 colorless?) + 1 red, as opposed to two Xs and 1 red. I don't think a discount goes well with the flavor of this card (as the idea is you're overpaying because you're getting something at the last minute as opposed to a careful purchase) but two Xs may be pushing it. I'm a sucker for XX spells, so it'd be a shame in my eyes to see that go, and I personally would see it as a win flavor-wise, the mana I spend on the spell represents the amount of effort I put into haggling for a better price, so I'd get a small discount for my efforts. I'm actually gonna grab this card idea for a deck if you don't mind too terribly. I see. That's a perspective I didn't consider, but it does make sense. Oh, and as for using, please feel free. I am quite a fan of that phrase "imitation is the highest form of praise". XD |
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Post by hydraheadhunter on May 5, 2022 16:54:20 GMT
Maestros Public Relations
A generic, a black, a blue, and a red
Enchantment
Whenever a nontoken creature you don't control dies, its controller may
pay its mana cost to return it to the battlefield under their control except it gains
"If this would leave the battlefield, exile it instead." When they do, you may return
a creature card from a graveyard to the battlefield under your control.
FT: A problem is only a problem if someone thinks of it as a problem.
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Next, a two part adlib: "I came here to [verb A] [noun A] and [verb B] [noun B]..." and "...and I'm all outta [noun B]."
This comes from the quote "kick ass and chew bubblegum, and I'm all outta bubblegum," but I don't want to commit you to a universe where bubblegum exists, you've got a lot of freedom here, but you will need to either design two cards or a double-faced card, one card face for each part.
I'm juust putting this at the bottom of the thread so it's somewhere people can find it at a glance instead of needing to figure out where the last entry was. |
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pernicious
8/8 Octopus
Posts: 440
Favorite Card: Mistmeadow Skulk
Favorite Set: Shadowmoor block
Color Alignment: Red
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Post by pernicious on May 12, 2022 22:27:19 GMT
Up: Really well done, it wouldn't look out of place in Streets of New Capenna. There's just a small wording error: "When they do, you may return...", it should have been "If they do, you may return..." since the condition is "its controller may".
I made two different cards, the second one is a small reference to Pinocchio.
Creature - Orc Warrior Devour Donkeys 3 (As this enters the battlefield, you may sacrifice any number of Donkey creatures. This creature enters the battlefield with three times that many +1/+1 counters on it.) "I came here to kick bubblegum and chew ass..." 1/1
Country of Toys
Land Country of Toys enters the battlefield tapped.
, Sacrifice X Donkeys: Create X Treasure tokens. "...and I'm all outta ass."
Next: "Close your eyes."
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Post by Idea on Jul 12, 2022 21:55:17 GMT
Up: I think it should be pointed out that there is actually a donkey creature type in MTG, only its called ass not donkey. Other than that, Donkey devourer is an ok, somewhat unremarkable but passable card. As for country of Toys.... with the treasure craze Wizards has been on lately I'm not sure how it stacks up against other cards, but I really get the impression that this degree of mana accumulation each turn is really really really strong, if not a little too much.
My entry: 
Next: "The bell falls silent for you. Today you are found innocent."
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Post by Flo00 on Jul 13, 2022 21:34:58 GMT
Up: Templating issues aside, this is quite the interesting card. I'm not sure if you just don't lose the life if you already lost one or if you also don't draw cards. Probably the first - or at least that makes more sense in my opinion. A nice build-around. I like how you can go for 2 life + to lose less life than the other players. Good use of phyrexian mana. Absolution Instant If target creature would die this turn, return it to its owner’s hand instead. Draw a card. “The bell falls silent for you. Today you are found innocent.”Next: I wish you’d burn in hell right now so we could meet again one day.You may turn this into a quote by someone. |
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pernicious
8/8 Octopus
Posts: 440
Favorite Card: Mistmeadow Skulk
Favorite Set: Shadowmoor block
Color Alignment: Red
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Post by pernicious on Oct 3, 2022 21:25:25 GMT
Up: It's well balanced, but I don't think that its effects and its name well convey the flavor text's content.
Creature - Human Assassin Haste
3/2
"I wish you’d burn in hell right now so we could meet again one day."
I imagine this card's artwork to be a couple of sinister lovey-dovey serial killers coming out holding hands from their own flaming graves while their other hands are wielding an axe, thus creating a symmetrical scene.
Next: "The seed of Eden has begun to rot. You do not have much time, son of Man."
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Post by hydraheadhunter on Oct 11, 2022 7:05:27 GMT
Is it weird that I'm haven't been getting notifications for this thread? Anyway...
Up: It's pretty plain and simple, and it conveys the idea well enough. I'd want to give it death touch or some lure effect to make it feel more impactful and give it the sense that it's sending something down to hell itself, but it's a decent card as is. Wretched Sphinx
Two generic, a black, and a green
Creature — Zombie Sphinx
Flying Deathtouch
Whenever a nontoken creature dies, each other player may scry 1 and you may surveil 2.
FT: “The seed of Eden has begun to rot. You do not have much time, son of Man.”
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Next, From a discord quote wall: "I pirated it and I still felt ripped off" and "I paid no money for this and I still want a refund." You can compose your own quote for the flavor text, just capture the spirit of the quotes. |
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pernicious
8/8 Octopus
Posts: 440
Favorite Card: Mistmeadow Skulk
Favorite Set: Shadowmoor block
Color Alignment: Red
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Post by pernicious on Nov 29, 2022 21:58:08 GMT
Up: In my opinion, it's perfect. I like how you chose a sphinx to deliver that ominous warning, I think it's a very appropriate choice.
Jewelry Golem  Art: A running hooded woman dressed as a typical rogue screams in pain as the jewels from a sack she's holding with her right hand have taken an angry humanoid form that is fully intent in biting her right arm. In the background, you can see an old, bearded man (the wizard-jeweler she robbed) laughing at the poor thief's misfortune.
Artifact Creature - Golem You may pay rather than pay this spell’s mana cost. Spend only mana produced by Treasures to cast it this way. 2/2
"I stole them, but I still want a refund!"
Next: "In a perfect world, men like me would not exist. But this is not a perfect world."
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Post by Idea on Dec 1, 2022 10:27:12 GMT
I really like how all the elements of the card come together, and even the effect simple as it is still kind of tells the story, as the discount can be a representation of it suddenly emerging and the treasure mana being naturally because it is literally made of treasure. The one thing I would say against this card is that it probably should only cost 2 originally. Yes that would weaken the impact of the effect, but it's still halving the cost which is giving you decent stats for 1 mana, while not making a vanilla 2/2 overly expensive.
A fandom based card, yes, but it was just too fitting not to do it, and I felt inspired in coming up with this design - however well it did or not turn out in the end - and I do think the general notion of what is happening in it is understandable through the card itself. Hopefully so is the appeal. 
Next: Since I'm bringing up Eminence in Shadow anyway, might as well take a quote from it - "This is our protagonist." |
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Post by Idea on Jul 2, 2023 0:27:42 GMT
(giving this one a little bump)
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Post by fluffydeathbringer on Jul 2, 2023 1:09:10 GMT
up: can't comment on lore accuracy, but as a card, it has some issues. 1) double strike isn't blue or black, 2) I don't know why this has to specify that the card transforms when it becomes day or night, since that's already how the mechanic works (well, the backside's transform condition is slightly different, but then that begs the question of why), 3) the front side is unplayably weak even with the death transform trigger, since the back side becoming the front side again is partially under your opponent's control, 4) the general notion of this character's deal doesn't really come through at all in this card (if I had to guess, the only thing I can read from this is that this guy has some kind of superpowered evil side that comes out when he's in mortal peril? but nothing else)
Enchantment - Aura Enchant creature Enchanted creature gets +2/+2, has lifelink, and is legendary. When enchanted creature leaves the battlefield, you may attach CARDNAME to another target creature. "This is our protagonist."
Next: Twice is a coincidence. Three times is a conspiracy.
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Post by ZephyrPhantom on Jul 4, 2023 22:45:07 GMT
Up: Constantly attaching itself to another creature is a neat way to have a card deal with the usual aura disadvantage of being hard to use in removal-heavy environments. It feels a bit odd that it isn't legendary itself - though, I guess there's nothing wrong with a party of 2-4 protagonists. Balance seems reasonable - probably ready for print in a set. Accumulating Schemes  Instant Scry X, where X is the number of times you've cast a spell named Accumulating Schemes, Dastardly Plot, or Stifling Resent this turn. Draw a card. "Twice is a coincidence. Three times is a conspiracy." - TianDastardly Plot is likely a weak removal spell and Stifling Resent is likely a weak tax/silence spell for the next spell cast. Something like: Stifling Resent Instant The next spell your opponent casts this turn costs  to cast, where X is the number of times you've cast a spell named Stifling Resent, Accumulating Schemes, or Dastardly Plot this turn. "Nothing is peace. Once is noted." - TianDastardly Plot Instant Target creature gets -X/-X until end of turn, where X is the number of times you've cast a spell named Dastardly Plot, Stifling Resent, or Accumulating Schemes this turn. "Once is noted. Twice is a coincidence." - TianNext: "What a piece of work is a man!" |
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Post by Idea on Jul 25, 2023 18:56:28 GMT
Considering the list of scry drawing cards, and that your card is an instant that will often scry 1 or 2, but sometimes will scry 3 or 4, I think it's pretty balanced, contrary to my first impressions of a card that only grows in 1 scry for each spell cast within a very small list of spells that aren't themselves that strong and you don't always want to play (and may not want in that order either). I'm not sure how powerful or playable cards like Meld cards and Throne, Scepter and Throne of Empires in general, but I guess so long as the card still kinda works without those this isn't as big of a deal.
Next: In [Word or Phrase], the law is survival of the [Word] |
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pernicious
8/8 Octopus
Posts: 440
Favorite Card: Mistmeadow Skulk
Favorite Set: Shadowmoor block
Color Alignment: Red
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Post by pernicious on Sept 6, 2023 19:31:06 GMT
Up: That's a clever, very well done design in both flavor and mechanics. My only nitpicks are: I would have preferred if it was a God Artificer instead, since I think Gods are more fitting for the role of "makers of humanity"; I wish the Sculpture tokens were artifact creatures that then lose their artifact type when they become Human as a way to emphasize their "becoming alive". But anyways, for me this is a perfect entry nonetheless.
Next: I'm not like the other girls. I'm worse.
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