kinotherapy
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stupid kor i just fell out of the floor
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Favorite Set: Rising Tides
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Post by kinotherapy on Jun 2, 2018 23:11:12 GMT
After the spellbook contest I realised that League characters (or I guess any MOBA character or even RPG characters with defined spellsets) would make a good fit for spellbooks. Tried a few more traditional mages before I found something I liked for my boy Twisted Fate {P - Loaded Dice}  {Q - Wild Cards}  {W - Pick a Card}  {E - Stacked Deck}  {R - Destiny}  I know these aren't that good and idk if anyone here plays or even tolerates legendland but eh I had fun. Fleur : Honestly these seem better than most of finalists' designs. Only things that bug me are Unscrupulous Looter which I still think is pushed after reading the commentary (as the ability is instant speed and has value just from the loot, and even when trading with an Eldrazi token it pushes 3 damage through to triplerummage) and From Within, which I think has tension with Emerge and could've just been an Emerge Eldrazi. I'm also not sure how Glimpse the Truth works without looking it up, whether you can choose to draw after you stack or if you have to do them in order, and it might not be appropriate for common if the ordering could trip players up. |
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Post by Deleted on Jun 3, 2018 8:17:24 GMT
Scalding Ray   Instant  Scalding Ray deals 4 damage to target creature and 4 - X damage to that creature's controller, where X is that creature's toughness. "That should stop that damn angel for a while!"
-Lorix FirebornSurprise Spider  Creature - Spider Flash (You may cast this spell any time you could cast an instant.)Reach, deathtouch 3/1
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Post by Tom Tomat on Jun 3, 2018 11:49:24 GMT
Fleur : Why there are 5 uncommons? 4 uncommons. One of them is a flipcard. There was an extra card in Eldritch packs, which always was a flipcard of random rarity. So there you go. |
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Post by Deleted on Jun 3, 2018 13:40:16 GMT
@tom Tomat: Okay, four uncommons. Still four. Inner Conflict  Sorcery  Create a token that's a copy of target creature. Then that token fights that creature. |
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Post by Tom Tomat on Jun 3, 2018 14:07:20 GMT
@tom Tomat: Okay, four uncommons. Still four. Dude, did you stop reading my response in the middle of the sentence? I stated that there was an extra card in every Eldritch booster of random rarity that always was a flip card. It could have been common, rare, or even mythic. I guess he wanted to make an uncommon. |
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Post by Deleted on Jun 3, 2018 14:21:54 GMT
@tom Tomat: Okay, four uncommons. Still four. Dude, did you stop reading my response in the middle of the sentence? I stated that there was an extra card in every Eldritch booster of random rarity that always was a flip card. It could have been common, rare, or even mythic. I guess he wanted to make an uncommon. Apparently I did lol. Sorry, five symbols have tricked me. Turn to Zombie  Sorcery Destroy target creature. Its controller creates a tapped 2/2 black Zombie creature token. Please help me come up with a name for this one. |
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Post by Fleur on Jun 3, 2018 21:43:35 GMT
sdfkjgh: Thanks for the feedback - allow me to address each of your critiques separately. The draw on Glimpse the Truth should definitely not come first -- that's my mistake. Ramshackle Recruitment actually ended up being quite polarizing in the other place I posted this -- some people thought it was too complex, but others thought it was fine since it was evocative and flavorful. In the end, I'll probably keep it simply because most of the other cards in the pack are eloquent enough that I can afford to eat up a bit of my complexity budget. Good catch on Unscrupulous Looter on all counts -- will definitely makes those fixes to it. Might also have to drop it down to 4/3 for power level reasons kinotherapy hinted at. However, I disagree with you on the blade splicer comparison on Brainless Domesticator -- the requirement for a discard probably makes this a bit less dangerous than the Splicer. Nonetheless, I think this may have been too pushed -- probably would've made him a 2/1 or 1/2 in hindsight. I also disagree that Final Assault would not be playable in other decks and would have little playability -- the presence of Overcome shows that Final Assault is probably fine. In fact, Final Assault could probably just give Humans an additional +1/+1 instead of +1/+1 counters. Also, Macabre Appetite could likely be instant and still be fine. Once again, thank you so much for the feedback 
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HvT
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Fugitive Wizard - Jim Nelson
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Favorite Card: Foil Island
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Post by HvT on Jun 4, 2018 0:18:27 GMT
Do you have a better name for this card? All on the Table  Sorcery  Starting with you, each player may put an artifact card from their hand onto the battlefield. Then, repeat this process for creatures, lands, planeswalkers, and enchantments. |
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oddnanref
3/3 Beast
Am I squirrel yet?
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Formerly Known As: Destiny, or full of yourself
Favorite Card: The one that is red and white all over
Favorite Set: The one with the new cool things
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Post by oddnanref on Jun 4, 2018 1:25:56 GMT
HvTScience Expo Science Fair Mine is better than yours Mine is ... Interplanar Rifts Science Festival Display Portal Bring Your Things ...I am out of ideas.
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Post by sdfkjgh on Jun 4, 2018 7:27:41 GMT
sdfkjgh : Thanks for the feedback - allow me to address each of your critiques separately. The draw on Glimpse the Truth should definitely not come first -- that's my mistake. Ramshackle Recruitment actually ended up being quite polarizing in the other place I posted this -- some people thought it was too complex, but others thought it was fine since it was evocative and flavorful. In the end, I'll probably keep it simply because most of the other cards in the pack are eloquent enough that I can afford to eat up a bit of my complexity budget. Good catch on Unscrupulous Looter on all counts -- will definitely makes those fixes to it. Might also have to drop it down to 4/3 for power level reasons kinotherapy hinted at. However, I disagree with you on the blade splicer comparison on Brainless Domesticator -- the requirement for a discard probably makes this a bit less dangerous than the Splicer. Nonetheless, I think this may have been too pushed -- probably would've made him a 2/1 or 1/2 in hindsight. I also disagree that Final Assault would not be playable in other decks and would have little playability -- the presence of Overcome shows that Final Assault is probably fine. In fact, Final Assault could probably just give Humans an additional +1/+1 instead of +1/+1 counters. Also, Macabre Appetite could likely be instant and still be fine. Once again, thank you so much for the feedback You misread my critique of Final Assault. What I said was any attempt to balance it towards playability in Humans decks removes playability in non-Humans decks. However, your fix of an additional +1/+1 until end of turn for Humans you control seems like it does the trick. I guess I was too focused on keeping the novelty of splitting the bonus between +N/+N ueot & +N/+N counters. |
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Post by sdfkjgh on Jun 4, 2018 7:29:37 GMT
Battlebond was awesome. I love playing 2HG now!
Team Pet  Creature--Hydra Assist (Another player can pay up to of this spell’s cost. You choose the value of X.)
Trample
Team Pet enters the battlefield with X +1/+1 counters on it, plus an additional +1/+1 counter on it for each mana another player spent to cast it. 0/0 |
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Kaiezer, the Fallen One
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... Making cards that desperately need balancing.
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Favorite Card: Fallen Angel
Favorite Set: Any Eldrazi, Innistrad, or Ravnica
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Post by Kaiezer, the Fallen One on Jun 4, 2018 18:26:37 GMT
GREETINGS, fellow planeswalkers and mages, I have many spells, monsters, and magical equipment of all kinds to display today!
First off, how about a new mechanic?
Backline - Reveal this card in your hand, [Effect]Render snipped. All renders require artist credit in the appropriate space. Please refer to the art sourcing primer for more details. - shiftyhomunculusNext, a new artifact type that I got from someone in the old site: Tomes!Render snipped.(Please ignore the lack of spacing on some parts, I don't know why its happening...)
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Post by Deleted on Jun 4, 2018 18:43:16 GMT
Kaiezer, the Fallen One: First, please limit the use of colorful font. After some time it becomes obnoxious. (Wait, Ob Nixilis, obnoxious... I see what you did there CheezWiz) Second, why is Ballista a Vehicle if it's not going to attack or ever be put onto the battlefield for that matter? Also, in the mechanic, is tapping and revealing a cost, or an ability?
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Kaiezer, the Fallen One
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... Making cards that desperately need balancing.
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Favorite Card: Fallen Angel
Favorite Set: Any Eldrazi, Innistrad, or Ravnica
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Post by Kaiezer, the Fallen One on Jun 4, 2018 18:57:07 GMT
Kaiezer, the Fallen One : First, please limit the use of colorful font. After some time it becomes obnoxious. (Wait, Ob Nixilis, obnoxious... I see what you did there CheezWiz) Second, why is Ballista a Vehicle if it's not going to attack or ever be put onto the battlefield for that matter? Also, in the mechanic, is tapping and revealing a cost, or an ability? Okay, Reveal is the cost, and it being a vehicle is mostly for flavor reasons. |
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Post by Deleted on Jun 4, 2018 19:28:00 GMT
Kaiezer, the Fallen One: Activated abilities' format is always "Cost: Ability." In your case, it would be "Reveal this card from your hand: Tap target creature with power 2 or less. This deals 2 damage to any target" or "Tap an untapped creature you control with power 2 or less, Reveal this card from your hand: It deals 2 damage to any target." I see flaws with both of these: - The first one is just terribly strong. It just means "If an opponent has at least one creature, you win the game." - The second one, which I think you were going with, is also busted. Let me translate it. It means "Creatures you control have "  : This creature deals 2 damage to any target."" And it is free! You don't even have to cast it! You might wanna add "Activate this ability only once each turn" there. By the way, it's weird to have an artifact that you can't put onto the battlefield and it does nothing even if it gets here. Also, noncreature subtypes are never (iirc) added for flavor. They are strictly mechanical. Arcane spells can be spliced, Shrines accumulate their effects, Equipment equips critters, Auras enchant things and Vehicles turn into broom-brooms.
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Kaiezer, the Fallen One
0/0 Germ
... Making cards that desperately need balancing.
Posts: 21
Favorite Card: Fallen Angel
Favorite Set: Any Eldrazi, Innistrad, or Ravnica
Color Alignment: White, Black, Colorless
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Post by Kaiezer, the Fallen One on Jun 4, 2018 20:10:54 GMT
Ah, okay... I've made another card.Render snipped. All renders require artist credit in the appropriate space. Please refer to the art sourcing primer for more details. - shiftyhomunculus(Would not be surprised if i worded something wrong...)
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Post by Deleted on Jun 4, 2018 20:31:53 GMT
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Kaiezer, the Fallen One
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... Making cards that desperately need balancing.
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Favorite Card: Fallen Angel
Favorite Set: Any Eldrazi, Innistrad, or Ravnica
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Post by Kaiezer, the Fallen One on Jun 4, 2018 20:34:51 GMT
... okay, i can see the problem here. I shall fix this.
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Post by Fleur on Jun 5, 2018 11:45:15 GMT
Secret Hideout Land : Add  .   , Sacrifice CARDNAME, : Exile two target creatures you control. Return them to the battlefield under their owner's control at the beginning of your next upkeep. Sheltered from the judgements of their parents, they met at noon in the tall grass fields. Embrace Company Sorcery  You gain 4 life. Then, if two or more creatures entered the battlefield this turn, you gain an additional 4 life. As day went on and the sun moved about, the two did not leave the other's side -- they walked, they talked, they held one another's hand. Sneak Out Sorcery You may put a creature card from your hand onto the battlefield. It gains haste. Shuffle it into your library at the beginning of your next end step. Some lonely days within their homes, they'd long to close the gap between, to meet once more for one more glance. Kira and Delin, the Two Legendary Creature - Human At the beginning of your upkeep, draw two cards, then discard two cards. , Exile a creature card from your graveyard: Create a token that's a copy of it, except its an enchantment. (It's no longer a creature.), Exile an instant or sorcery card from your graveyard: CARDNAME deals damage equal to that card's cost to target creature or planeswalker. "We think as two and feel as one." 3/3 |
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Post by sdfkjgh on Jun 6, 2018 4:19:36 GMT
Fleur: I loved the retelling of Romeo & Juliet your cards were doing, up until the Legendary Creature. That one just fell flat for me. I'm sure if it was presented on its own merits, and not as the final part of a story told in 4 cards, I'd prolly like it better, but as part of that story it just doesn't work for me. Dude? "Well, that's just, like, your opinion, man."
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Post by Deleted on Jun 6, 2018 5:08:57 GMT
Narcosis Sorcery Tap target creature. It doesn't untap during its controller's next two untap steps.
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Post by sdfkjgh on Jun 7, 2018 21:28:29 GMT
Deny Instant Choose one—
• Counter target creature spell.
• Return target creature to its owner’s hand. |
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oddnanref
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Am I squirrel yet?
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Formerly Known As: Destiny, or full of yourself
Favorite Card: The one that is red and white all over
Favorite Set: The one with the new cool things
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Post by oddnanref on Jun 8, 2018 2:15:28 GMT
sdfkjghSeems fine. One half would cost the other half would cost at that rarity. You are adding color density for having the extra choice.
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Post by Flo00 on Jun 8, 2018 23:47:58 GMT
Erase History ::1::::W::::B::
Instant ::rare::
Exile target historic permanent.
I just thought there should be a card with this rules text.
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Post by Flo00 on Jun 9, 2018 0:02:28 GMT
Narcosis Sorcery Tap target creature. It doesn't untap during its controller's next two untap steps. It's a nice effect, but it requires long-term tracking without any indicator. "Did you tap my creature three turns ago or five?" Sometimes I forget freeze effects even after one round of exciting combats. I think you should use counters. Something like Tap target creature and put two whatever counters on it. As long as it has a whatever counter, it has "Instead of untapping this during your untap step, remove a whatever counter from it." I think there might even be some older card doing something like this. |
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Post by sdfkjgh on Jun 9, 2018 1:36:11 GMT
Guiltfeeder? I don't know what you're talking about, I swear!
Mindbender Abomination  Creature--Horror Trample, menace, rampage 3
Whenever Mindbender Abomination attacks and isn’t blocked, defending player puts the top three cards of their library into their graveyard, then loses life equal to the number of cards in their graveyard. 0/6 |
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Post by voltaic-qui on Jun 9, 2018 1:41:36 GMT
Narcosis Sorcery Tap target creature. It doesn't untap during its controller's next two untap steps. It's a nice effect, but it requires long-term tracking without any indicator. "Did you tap my creature three turns ago or five?" Sometimes I forget freeze effects even after one round of exciting combats. I think you should use counters. Something like Tap target creature and put two whatever counters on it. As long as it has a whatever counter, it has "Instead of untapping this during your untap step, remove a whatever counter from it." I think there might even be some older card doing something like this. Alternately... you could cast Take into Custody during your opponent's upkeep, which is almost functionally identical to this. |
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Post by sdfkjgh on Jun 11, 2018 22:07:02 GMT
@gorgonzola: I just finished reviewing Telekinesis for No Reservations II two days ago.
unrelated:
Ulka, the Fallen Sky Legendary Artifact Splashdown X (When a creature with splashdown X enters the battlefield, it deals X damage to each other creature. When a noncreature permanent with splashdown X enters the battlefield, it deals X damage to each creature.)
Whenever a creature dealt damage by Ulka, the Fallen Sky this turn dies, put a catastrophe counter on Ulka, the Fallen Sky.
: Until end of turn, Ulka, the Fallen Sky becomes a colorless Legendary Artifact Creature—Golem with trample and “This creature’s power and toughness are each equal to the number of catastrophe counters on it” in addition to its other abilities. |
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Post by Deleted on Jun 12, 2018 12:25:02 GMT
sdfkjgh: Oh, Legends. Didn't even know this card. Which part did you review it in? Eldritch Sliver  Creature - Eldrazi Sliver All Slivers have annihilator 1. 3/3
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Post by sdfkjgh on Jun 12, 2018 16:21:02 GMT
sdfkjgh : Oh, Legends. Didn't even know this card. Which part did you review it in? 4f, the final part of Legends. That's going up this week. |
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