Shelon Eternal Cards - Final Hours

Sorry, I never elaborated upon that. I want to work on a set that revolves around a dying plane that keeps cycling through its final hours eternally.

The set is going to make use of suspend, and I hope to make use of time counters in new and unique ways. Currently, Final Hours does exactly what you say it does, though...

EDIT

Simply posting the card designs here is helping me realize what is a good idea and what is a bad idea. Without any sort of positive interaction with current cards, and no new ideas to show why this might be good in the set, especially considering that the mechanics that do end up in the set may never interact with this card positively are clear signs that it's a poor design.

For the moment.

Now with this knowledge I can move onto newer and bigger mistakes!



This one moves past the original idea of "What if the suspended card interacted with suspended cards? And also lost you the game?" and into the realm of "What if the suspended card had a very powerful effect, but will eventually lose you the game?"

If I didn't convey the flavor, then it is a failure. I will do my best to explain the idea behind it.

The Plane of Shelon is dying and repeating its final moments over and over in a desperate attempt to continue on. This is causing a sort of Groundhogs Day scenario where in the last moment of its death throes, as every part of itself and the inhabitants of the world are about to be lost to the void, it pulls back to a previous moment of existence only to wait for its inevitable end again, from which it will pull back again and again. The cards that are exiled and returned were to represent this loss to the void at the end and being brought back from the brink. The Lose the Game is when the World can't hold on any longer.

I am open to how I can better portray this flavor, while also making it a functional card, and still fit the color pie.

One thing is, I think you were onto something with your original version. While the current is very powerful, it probably wouldn't be very fun to play against, as it just sits there and beats on you for several turns until its controller either eventually wins or loses. Meanwhile, there's not a whole lot that can be done to it, other than removing time counters to speed up the clock, which means focusing on an opponent's card rather than playing your own. An enchantment that kills you when it dies isn't out of character for Black, and it makes something that a player can respond to. Maybe give the enchantment Shroud so it's a little harder to deal with - both for opponents and the controller.

Something along these lines;

Shroud
Vanishing N

As [CARDNAME] enters the battlefield, you lose life equal to your life total.
You don't lose the game for having 0 or less life. ^{(Yes, that is the Lich effect.)}

...then add some other powerful effect that makes up for putting your life on a time limit. It gives you some power, captures the "world is ending" flavor, and has something on the board where, however difficult, your opponent(s) can try to do something about it.

It's been a while since I've been to the forums, and I completely forgot about this card and thread.


kefke
That sounds a lot more reasonable, and something I will definitely take into consideration. I will probably change a lot about this card, that is if it even remains anywhere close to staying in the set.


ameisenmeister
I think you missed that the 7 is not part of the cost, but how long it stays suspended. It only costs . Either way, it's probably going to see some major changes.