the5lacker
3/3 Beast
Posts: 198
Favorite Card: The Reality Chip
Favorite Set: Kaladesh
Color Alignment: White, Blue
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Post by the5lacker on Dec 20, 2019 15:43:39 GMT
And now for the feedback round. kefke: Repeatable permanent stealing seems really good for 3 mana and probably shouldn't be an uncommon, even permanents as niche as enchantments. I do like the concept though. I'd recommend bumping it up to a least 4 and a rare, maybe as a 2/4 or something. ZephyrPhantom: Seems quite strong. +2/+0 and Trample for R is already quite efficient as far as Auras go, and the ability to move it around adds quite a bit of complexity to combat, especially if you mix in something like First Strike. FLAREdirector: Because Bestow is an alternate cost, cost reductions like the first ability already applies to it. That last ability seems a bit overly wordy. Why not just... go with the wording on Simic Guildmage? @daij_Djan: That ultimate's a needlessly elaborate way of saying "You win the game." There's literally no way in a 1v1 for you to lose the game after that resolves, short of already being dead. That first ability should also probably target. viriss: That is an incredibly suspicious "becomes attached" right there. darknova: That text is incomprehensible and meaningless. I can't even figure out what you're trying to do enough to even give feedback. lizstar: Only feedback I've got is "in" should be "from." I like the idea of using the -Form structure from Fate Reforged to condense the paragraph of magic-ese that is Animate Dead. Jartis: "On purpose" doesn't justify bad decisions. Equipment that you can't equip is bad. Overly complicating the simple ability of "Creatures you control have firebreathing" is bad. Taking a design and making it bad to force it to fit into a contest is bad. Use the challenge as a jumping off point, not as a stranglehold. @aargh: Dragon man makes dragons. I like it. Fermat: That's a giant pile of words for a card that I don't think actually, you know, works. And isn't even remotely White. Also, you have an Aura that permanently alters things it gets attached to, even after it gets removed, which is just... no. @gluestick: Infinite life with one other creature and a single pair of boots? Mmmkay... Xenagos: I said it on my own card, but token copies of auras is probably a bad idea. It's a bad idea I can get behind, but still, if we're being objective, it's a memory hazard. Also, technically strictly worse than Estrid's Invocation. Tesagk: "Cast." It's been cast for a decade. Also, are you expected to keep track of EVERY single creature spell you've cast during your entire game? Seriously? sade612: I like the tech of adding power/toughness modifications to the box in the bottom right, but the card seems... low impact. Playing hot potato with a Demotion doesn't seem terribly interesting. @augur: Woo! Fortifications represent! Could probably be a hair stronger, but I'm not sure in which way. More toughness maybe? jarribas309: You're missing a "target" in there. spazlaz: Technically, Curses still need to be Auras. Seriously. It's dumb. As for the card itself, feels... unimpactful. Mill one per turn isn't much. A 2/2 flier for 3 is decent in limited, at least, but that much text for that little impact feels wrong.
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Post by Tesagk on Dec 20, 2019 16:05:13 GMT
Tesagk : "Cast." It's been cast for a decade. Also, are you expected to keep track of EVERY single creature spell you've cast during your entire game? Seriously? 😴
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Post by kefke on Dec 20, 2019 16:15:42 GMT
the5lackerI'm sure you're trying to be helpful, but please don't critique my entries any more. It honestly comes off as somewhat condescending. You are, essentially, suggesting that I didn't put any thought into my submission whatsoever, and belittling the effort I put into designing the card, comparing it to other cards, and pouring over an officially produced guide to rarity to decide exactly where it belonged on the spectrum. I am, quite frankly, offended by the criticism. In any case, I have previously stated that I design my cards for my satisfaction. Entering the CotW contest is not something I do with any sincere desire to be competitive. I simply enjoy being given a creative prompt to work off of, and sharing what I come up with. If anyone else likes it, that is a pleasant surprise, as my tastes run both strange and a little archaic for modern Magic™ formats. I have already put plenty of thought into making a card that I like, and that is more important to me than trying to conform to everyone else's expectations. Thank you for your interest and consideration, but I ask that you not argue, and please respect my wishes.
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Post by fluffydeathbringer on Dec 20, 2019 17:47:10 GMT
inb4 there was a less clunky way to phrase this effect that I missed
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Post by sade612 on Dec 20, 2019 21:59:18 GMT
I'm updating my entry since it just so happens I made an even cooler card before I left home and I'm back today. Don't read into it (hehe, mail pun XD) as a passive aggression or anything, I just wanted to show off a stronger card after getting feedback from the5lacker and I'm a thrash metal fan. {old post} I really like the idea of playing Hot Potato with magic cards.
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Post by voltaic-qui on Dec 20, 2019 22:32:21 GMT
Doubled Edge Enchantment - Aura Flash Enchant Equipment Whenever enchanted Equipment becomes attached to a creature, that creature deals damage to itself equal to its power. You'd think there'd be art for this, right? Guess not. Artificer's Hex with funnier flavor. (Flash comes before "Enchant foo," in case that looks weird.)
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Post by Jartis on Dec 21, 2019 1:48:53 GMT
the5lacker I'm gonna have to agree with kefke. Your feedback as a whole, not just of my submission, comes off as incredibly rude. That said, I will present further justifications for myself, because I believe that in your desire to conform to designs of the past, you've missed several points. Equipment without an equip cost can still be equipped to features via abilities or other spells. While effectively the ability grants firebreathing, it does so in a way that increases your count of permanents, artifacts, and enchantments, as well as triggering etb triggers for any of those categories. You might not like the design, it may even be bad, but it isn't bad just because of user shortsightedness
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Post by FLAREdirector on Dec 21, 2019 2:14:29 GMT
I guess, while we're talking--sorry, 5lacker, I just don't, uh, care? I know that sounds harsh. Sorry. Just, you know, if I want feedback, I'll ask for it. And with these CotW contests, it's just fun to submit stuff, you know? I'm not looking to make The Best Card Imaginable. I'm not even really looking to make The Best Version Of This Card Imaginable. I just like making stuff and sending it for submission.
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Post by Aarhg on Dec 21, 2019 2:23:29 GMT
the5lacker About spazlaz's card, the trigger happens every time the creature hits the opponent, so it can actually become pretty dangerous. I'd maybe make it a 1/2 or 1/3 though. Just seems to fit better with a card intended for mill strats.
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the5lacker
3/3 Beast
Posts: 198
Favorite Card: The Reality Chip
Favorite Set: Kaladesh
Color Alignment: White, Blue
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Post by the5lacker on Dec 21, 2019 17:32:43 GMT
the5lacker I'm sure you're trying to be helpful, but please don't critique my entries any more. It honestly comes off as somewhat condescending. You are, essentially, suggesting that I didn't put any thought into my submission whatsoever, and belittling the effort I put into designing the card, comparing it to other cards, and pouring over an officially produced guide to rarity to decide exactly where it belonged on the spectrum. I am, quite frankly, offended by the criticism. In any case, I have previously stated that I design my cards for my satisfaction. Entering the CotW contest is not something I do with any sincere desire to be competitive. I simply enjoy being given a creative prompt to work off of, and sharing what I come up with. If anyone else likes it, that is a pleasant surprise, as my tastes run both strange and a little archaic for modern Magic™ formats. I have already put plenty of thought into making a card that I like, and that is more important to me than trying to conform to everyone else's expectations. Thank you for your interest and consideration, but I ask that you not argue, and please respect my wishes. How on God's green earth is that any flavor of offensive? The literal singular reason to share things publicly is to gain the perspective of others. If people not showering you with bland praise is a problem, I have to ask... why are you here? I'm here to improve my design skills. I'm here to learn. I don't understand how I could learn if I shut everyone who disagreed with me out, so I have to assume there's some other reason you're here and I can't understand why. Do me a solid, help me understand. Why are you here?
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Post by sdfkjgh on Dec 21, 2019 18:02:06 GMT
the5lacker: Any chance I could get some critiquing? I'm actually here to learn.
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Post by kefke on Dec 21, 2019 18:11:48 GMT
the5lackerI asked you not to argue. I asked you to stop. Please stop.
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Post by voltaic-qui on Dec 21, 2019 18:46:42 GMT
the5lacker : Any chance I could get some critiquing? I'm actually here to learn. I'll weigh in - isn't your card better expressed as an instant? I have a feeling that's closer to the intended functionality as well (a creature gets +X/+X the first turn and -X/-X every other turn).
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Post by kefke on Dec 21, 2019 19:15:43 GMT
the5lacker : Any chance I could get some critiquing? I'm actually here to learn. I'll weigh in - isn't your card better expressed as an instant? I have a feeling that's closer to the intended functionality as well (a creature gets +X/+X the first turn and -X/-X every other turn). I don't think it would really work as an Instant. The card needs to stick around to have its effect on later turns. Plus, as an instant it would be much harder to word it in a way that satisfies the challenge and isn't weird.
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Post by sdfkjgh on Dec 21, 2019 21:01:57 GMT
the5lacker : Any chance I could get some critiquing? I'm actually here to learn. I'll weigh in - isn't your card better expressed as an instant? I have a feeling that's closer to the intended functionality as well (a creature gets +X/+X the first turn and -X/-X every other turn). Wow, you're really feeding the sockpuppet theorists here.
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Post by voltaic-qui on Dec 22, 2019 2:23:32 GMT
I'll weigh in - isn't your card better expressed as an instant? I have a feeling that's closer to the intended functionality as well (a creature gets +X/+X the first turn and -X/-X every other turn). I don't think it would really work as an Instant. The card needs to stick around to have its effect on later turns. Plus, as an instant it would be much harder to word it in a way that satisfies the challenge and isn't weird. Overclock TWO!!! X(b/r) Instant (uncommon) Put X -1/-1 counters on target creature. Until end of turn, that creature gets +2/+2 for each counter placed on it this way. Now, this doesn't fulfill the challenge requirements at all, of course - but there's more to life than the Card of the Week Contest.
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Post by Lady Mapi on Dec 22, 2019 3:29:51 GMT
I'll weigh in - isn't your card better expressed as an instant? I have a feeling that's closer to the intended functionality as well (a creature gets +X/+X the first turn and -X/-X every other turn). Wow, you're really feeding the sockpuppet theorists here. Theorists? Her "formerly known as" entry on her portfolio is "the5lacker". I thought this was general knowledge.
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Post by sdfkjgh on Dec 22, 2019 16:17:19 GMT
Wow, you're really feeding the sockpuppet theorists here. Theorists? Her "formerly known as" entry on her portfolio is "the5lacker". I thought this was general knowledge. Until voltaic-qui and the5lacker both publicly come out and say "We're the same person", there's still some leeway of doubt.
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Fermat
8/8 Octopus
Posts: 436
Favorite Card: Force of Will
Favorite Set: Guildpact (set when I started playing)
Color Alignment: White, Blue, Black
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Post by Fermat on Dec 23, 2019 13:36:03 GMT
So I tried to use MSE to make a card for Transience and boy was it busy. Here's something different. Wisdom of the Eternities Enchantment — Aura Enchant planeswalker When ~ becomes attached to a planeswalker, put a loyalty counter on that planeswalker. Enchanted planeswalker has " : Draw a card." I'm not sure if this wording is correct.
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Post by voltaic-qui on Dec 23, 2019 18:05:55 GMT
So I tried to use MSE to make a card for Transience and boy was it busy. Here's something different. Wisdom of the Eternities Enchantment — Aura Enchant planeswalker When ~ becomes attached to a planeswalker, put a loyalty counter on that planeswalker. Enchanted planeswalker has " : Draw a card." I'm not sure if this wording is correct. Nope - well, there aren't any Auras with enchant planeswalker for reference, but most Auras with this sort of effect just use ETB triggers ( Claustrophobia et al). Functionality is technically different with Aura Graft or whatever, I guess?
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Post by Daij_Djan on Dec 23, 2019 19:56:53 GMT
This thread is now closed, the poll can be found here. And here's the next challenge!
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