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Post by arthurxiv on Sept 1, 2019 11:07:47 GMT
The green one has to be an instant/sorcery OR you have to specify "When ~ enters the battlefield" or something like that. For the Caveman you have to specify which player's next upkeek is affected. It seems also that we cannot read the artist's name on the green one.
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cumulonimbus
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Post by cumulonimbus on Sept 3, 2019 1:36:27 GMT
Thank you for the advice. I'll adjust accordingly.
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Post by Daij_Djan on Sept 3, 2019 7:10:40 GMT
Moved this thread over to our Card Clinic area. Also removed Giant Lavender Labyrinth of Michigan as it was indeed impossible to read the artist credit just as arthurxiv pointed out. ~Daij_Djan
I do wonder about you Giant Lavender Labyrinth of Michigan a bit - is it supposed to be directly a Pacifism-effect? If so, it should be an Aura as well, but at rare this would feel rather weak. I'm not really one to judge cards outside of the traditional color wheel, but for Pink Flamingo again see Pacifism for the correct wording (also the name sounds more like a creature card?). Frozen Caveman thawing by paying  is definitely cute  |
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Post by Jéské Couriano on Sept 3, 2019 18:07:15 GMT
Caveman ) "~ enters the battlefield tapped unless was spent to cast it." Since upkeep comes immediately after untap and effects like this trigger at the beginning of that phase, the difference is very much academic.
Pink Flamingo ) "Enchanted creature can't attack or block." ( Pacifism and like effects.) |
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cumulonimbus
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Post by cumulonimbus on Sept 3, 2019 20:04:17 GMT
Thank you moderator for moving the thread. A bit new to board and wasn't sure where to start. And thank you all for the feedback.
The deck I'm designing is intended for extremely casual play at home, so I hope to add a little whimsy in addition to operating out of the box a little bit.
Anyway, here are the card updates : First 'Giant Lavender Labyrinth of Michigan'. Understand, I am an Old Magic Campaigner just getting back into the game after 20 or so years. Back then, an enchantment was an enchantment. The Aura, Shrine, etc., confuses me. I've altered it somewhat to be an aural enchantment assigned to a creature. The intent was to have some hapless creature so lured by the intoxicating smell of so much lavender they just go around and around the maze until the owner slaps him silly by disenchanting the poor creature. Admittedly, the original concept was for a corpse flower since so many people go to botanical gardens to smell it. But a FB post of the Labyrinth popped up and, voila, here it is. Many of the card images I use come from the internet and the source material is hard to track down. So I omitted it. The line of Lavenders was just because I haven't gotten the hang of the popout process.
'Frozen Caveman' was put forth as an introduction to the brown color, which, IMHO, is 'Cave' mana. As mentioned previously, this is intended to be an in-home use thing anyway, so why not? I had, as others suspected, wording issues on how to incorporate the red mana into the casting. The input received helped me to clarify it.
'Pink Flamingo' delves into the meadow/pink arena and, yes, is a direct rework of white's Pacifism. Using Scryfall, I adjusted the casting cost, commonality, and wording. Again, IMHO, pink speaks to me of the emotional, silly side of life. So, I went with it.
Hope this clarifies things a bit. Any way, here are the reworks. And, as always, constructive advice is welcomed.
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cumulonimbus
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Post by cumulonimbus on Sept 3, 2019 20:05:40 GMT
For some reason, I am unable to uploard the new images.
I will try again later.
Worked
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